See/Look

see,

look

within

my brown eyes,

you will be dazzled

and I will bear your weight because

as dark as I am, that is something I always do,

.

as dark as I am, that is something I always do,

you can judge me if you desire,

spurt me with wise words,

but look, see

within

these

eyes,

.

you

will

find my

lost shadow

and you will see me

as I am without my white mask

and my scars will be on display just for you to view,

.

all my scars will be on display just for you to view,

the blotted marks of a known truth-

life is hard to live,

grasp this fact

once you

see

me.

.

* Mine are brown but rather hollow; they don’t say anything. They remain mum.

** Fibonacci poetry (which I liked a lot once) for dVerse Form For All.

32 thoughts on “See/Look

  1. nice…i like the looking into the eyes to really see me, the shadow beyond the white mask…very interesting contrast in that….the scars and marks of truth as well….so true that…

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    • Thanks. I have tried palindrome a number of times but the result never came out to be really good. So I did not give it a go this time… I just worked on the easier thing. 🙂

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  2. This was very effective in many ways. The formula yielded an almost concrete poem, the line repetition gave it a musical quality, and the subject matter explicated your unique truths. Excellent.

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  3. ….yes…yes…yes… the eyes will never lie… our eyes are the mirror of our soul and never failed to raise the truth… loved this… & the repetition of the final lines to serve as the starting line of the succeeding fib works verywell… smiles…

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